Friday, September 4, 2009

BEDTIME STORY, pt. 2 of ??

BEDTIME STORY

By Jeffery Whitmore


 

"Careful, honey, it's loaded," he said, re-entering the bedroom.


 

Her back rested against the headboard. "This is for your wife?"


 

"No. Too chancy. I'm hiring a professional."


 

"How about me?"


 

He smirked. "Cute. But who'd be dumb enough to hire a lady hit man?"


 

She wet her lips, sighting along the barrel.


 

"Your wife."


 

I am becoming very, very tired of this story. These measly 55 words create a scene, not a full short story!! That's my biased, no-coffee-at-8am opinion, and I'm sticking to it.


 

The theme of this tiny speck of a story is somewhat unclear, simply because it is so short. Having said that, it seems that the message that the author is trying to convey is twofold: that it takes a certain kind of person to kill a spouse, and sometimes, we don't know a person as well as we think we do.

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